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>Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important characteristic for a politician or a leader is good communication skill.
--这是TOEFL TWE Topic 2011-11-20的题目，是一道典型的agree or disagree题。意为：你是否同意，领导或者政治家最重要的技能是好的沟通技能。


建议破题思路：谈领导人物与高级政客的优势特质，绝对与口才息息相关。这个题目看起来宽泛，但只要找好切入点，还是比较容易入手的。英语作文最好的办法就是以小见大，一个看起“大”的问题，由一个“小”地方切入，再慢慢展开到大的问题，这样思路容易建立起来，逻辑也比较畅通。比如说，我们这么想，领导/政治家最重要的是什么？选票！为什么会有选票？因为跟随他的群众信任他，对他有信心。OK，可见好的口才、或者是其它的领导艺术，最终目的是要激起群众的信心。在这里我们就找到了一个切入点：信心！破题完成，好的口才重要与否，还得看是否能激起群众的信心。那么接下来就好说了。


比如这篇，提出来：传播能力并非首要，作者的立场是口才应该是居第二，德行第一，因为唯有言行一致，群众才会产生信心。

Contrary to the common belief that good communication skill is vital to becoming a leader, actually leadership is practiced not so much in words as in actions that inspire confidence. It may be said that leaders are usually good talkers but the reverse is not necessarily true. A leader had better be recognized as a dealer in confidence, one who knows the way, goes the way and shows the way and, in addition, is good at the art of communication as the language of leadership.

A leader's right actions plus perhaps effective words can do magic to get the message carrying confidence across to others and guide them to hope more, dream more, become more, and even fly higher. This refers particularly to an extraordinary leader as a politician whose better ideas lead to popular trust, as often happens in more difficult times. Remember a Chinese proverb to that effect? "Not the cry, but the flight of a wild duck, leads the flock to fly and follow." One's good communication skill, like talking more and speaking louder, might otherwise be just hollow words, should one's deeds not match that kind of virtue which wins trust from followers. Accordingly, it stands to reason that the greater one is in power above others, the more one ought to excel them in virtue since none ought to lead who is not better than others.

To do justice to good communication skill, it is better to look at it as a big advantage rather than a great virtue in the moral sense of the word. As can be seen ever so often, what matters to the audience is the singer and not the song, meaning a crafted talker can move the mob, even though the message may be far from correct politically. And that is probably why so many ordinary leaders are seen, who represent the power of persuasion and not the real aspirations of their followers. From this viewpoint, good communication skill alone may actually make an ordinary leader, but may still be short of making a good leader, let alone a great leader. The difference lies in that a good leader can inspire people to have confidence in the leader. And a great leader can further inspire people to have confidence in themselves as well.

The confidence factor aside, good talkers have always ruled and will continue to rule, with the results of some cases ending well and some ending badly. Therefore it is desirable having the combination of the virtue of leadership and the art of eloquence. Nevertheless, the ultimate truth must be acknowledged that true leadership is always associated with virtuous actions rather than simply with skillful communication in words.

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