【2014.7.29】托福独立作文练习

山姆大叔

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, e-mail, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

eivissa

In today sociaty,the pace of live is very quickly.Human lives have changed dramatically.It is the same in the way of communication between people.In this case,I totally convince that electronic communication is better than face-to-face communication.

Firstly of all,it is convenient for us to communication with some tools,such as E-mail and telephone call.As we all know,Google is a huge company.The workers from this company are spread in every corner of the world.When the managers in this company need to give some assignment to the workers,they just need to have a telephone-meeting with wrokers.Through this way ,it is easy for workers to communicate with his managers and colleagues.Also,It is a way to save time both for the workers and companies.It also good for working efficiency.Using this way,we can communicate freely in everywhere than ever before.Even when we travel to other place,we still can share some information to others using cellphone.It will help us a lot when we need to talk to others.

Furthermore,some electrinic communications are more private. In today’s warm,countries use technological communications to share improtant informations.Because the win or lose may depends on those imfornation.For such a important thing,most countries only use special tools to communicate to prevent those from releasing.So we can see.It is a kind of advantage to have some specific communication tool.These may help us a lot when we fight with other countries. Even in our daily life,if we want to have some private talk,we can use our cellphone privately so that others couldn’t konw what you have talked.

As some people insist that face-to-fece communication is better because it can use eyes contact and body language to let others know the expression exactly.According to a research from BBC,72% of people convince that the quality of communication are no diffierence between  tellphone and face-to-face.That’s prove that even using E-mail to communicate,people also can get the point which others want to express.It is obviously that other ways communication is take the place of face-to-face talk.

The thchnology in communication has improved our lives greatly.As a conclusion,I believe that people should use other ways to communicate instead of have face-to-face talk.Such ways are positive and it did improve the quality of penple’s communication.

山姆大叔

eivissa 发表于 2014-7-29 23:58
In today sociaty,the pace of live is very quickly.Human lives have changed dramatically.It is the sa ...

这篇作文在结构上可以了，但是在细节造句上还是有很多问题，要注意。差不多可以打到22分左右。

In today sociaty,the pace of live（life） is very quickly.Human lives have changed dramatically.It is the same in the way of communication between people.In this case,I totally convince(我确信某事，要用I'm convinced) that electronic communication is better than face-to-face communication.

Firstly of all（要么是first of all, 要么是firstly）,it is convenient for us to communication(communication是名词，要用commnunicate) with some tools,such as E-mail and telephone call.As we all know,Google is a huge company.The workers from this company are spread in every corner of the world.When the managers in this company need to give some assignment to the workers,they just need to have a telephone-meeting with wrokers.Through this way ,it is easy for workers to communicate with his managers and colleagues.Also,It is a way to save time both for the workers and companies.It (is) also good for working efficiency.Using this way(通过某种方法，用by this way),we can communicate freely in everywhere than ever before.Even when we travel to other place,we still can share some information to others using cellphone.It will help us a lot when we need to talk to others.

Furthermore,some electrinic communications are more private. In today’s warm,countries use technological communications to share improtant informations.Because the win or lose may depends on those imfornation.For such a important thing,most countries only use special tools to communicate to prevent those from releasing.(写例子要具体？most countries是哪些国家？美国？英国？不要怕写得具体考官会抓，你写得不具体考官才会怀疑你的说服力)So we can see.It is a kind of advantage to have some specific communication tool.These may help us a lot when we fight with other countries. Even in our daily life,if we want to have some private talk,we can use our cellphone privately so that others couldn’t konw what you have talked.

As some people insist that face-to-fece communication is better because it can use eyes contact and body language to let others know the expression exactly.According to a research from BBC,72% of people convince that the quality of communication are no diffierence（没有不同用not different） between  tellphone and face-to-face.That’s (the) prove that even using E-mail to communicate,people also can get the point which others want to express.It is obviously that other ways communication is (可以代替用be able to take the place of) take the place of face-to-face talk.

The thchnology in communication has improved our lives greatly.As a conclusion,I believe that people should use other ways to communicate instead of have face-to-face talk.Such ways are positive and it did(前面是ways,后面就要用they do) improve the quality of penple’s communication.