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With the exponential advancements of modern life,people suffer from increasing pressures .Not only the life burden,but also intense competitions in the work or study overwhelm citizens ,which makes alleviating stress became one of the top issues in people’s hearts.Someone prefer to stay alone to get rid of those stress,I,however,hardly agree with it for the following reasons.

First and foremost,staying alone probably makes people insulated from their friends who care about them.Friends,undoubtedly,provide great help to people.Friends like the fire ,giving people warm in the chilling winter;friends like the oasis in the desert,bringing people cool and water;friends like the saving boat,preventing people from struggling in the ocean.No matter which situation are people trapped in, friends will spare no effort to give a hand.While talking with their friends,surely worries or anxieties caused by stressful life will disappear.Consequently,without friends,hardly can people remove their pressures.

Secondly,staying alone will change people’s altitude to the negative one.Negative altitudes,such as rebellion or depression,will increase the stress rather than reduce them.Nowadays,most fashion stars,like Briteny Spears or Lindsey Lohan,suffer unimaginable pressures although they have become the top stars in the world.Unfortunately, as a star, they have to stay alone to avoid unreal scandals,and thus such condition badly accounts for the negative altitudes like rebellion or anger.Finally their pressures accumulated to the point where they took drugs and were addicted to alcohol,resulting in losing fame and chances for development.Consequently,negative emotions exert harmful impacts on individual and always increase the stress and intensify the problem.

Some people may incline to staying alone because it can create a quiet and private environments.However,it is not the case.Quiet and private condition does not always alleviate the load.Statistics show that over 90 percents of students who prepare for the college entrance examination feel more stressed when they are left alone.And above 70 percents people who admitted suicides had few friends and always were insulated from the society.Quiet environments are likely to imply people that they are abandoned.While those thoughts are filling their mind,unavoidably they feel more depressed and sensitive.Thus,chances that the quieter the conditions are, more pressures  people go through.

Generally speaking,staying alone do no help to remove pressures.Contrarily,people will intense their problem if they always stay alone and avoid interact with others.In the modern life,only if people communicate frequently with others and maintaining a positive altitudes to the life can they finally get rid of pressures and overcome difficulties as well.

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With the exponential advancements of modern life,people suffer from increasing pressures .Not only the life burden,but also intense competitions in the work or study overwhelm citizens ,which makes alleviating stress became（become） one of the top issues in people’s hearts.Someone prefer to stay alone to get rid of those stress,I,however,hardly agree with it for the following reasons.

First and foremost,staying alone probably makes people insulated from their friends who care about them.Friends,undoubtedly,provide great help to people.Friends like(表示XX像XX，要用be like或者直接用be动词) the fire ,giving people warm in the chilling winter;friends like the oasis in the desert,bringing people cool and water;friends like the saving boat,preventing people from struggling in the ocean.No matter which（what） situation are people trapped in, friends will spare no effort to give a hand.While talking with their friends,surely worries or anxieties caused by stressful life will disappear.Consequently,without friends,hardly can people remove their pressures.

Secondly,staying alone will change people’s altitude to the negative one.Negative altitudes,such as rebellion or depression,will increase the stress rather than reduce them.Nowadays,most fashion stars,like Briteny Spears or Lindsey Lohan,suffer unimaginable pressures although they have become the top stars in the world.Unfortunately, as a star, they have to stay alone to avoid unreal scandals,and thus such condition badly accounts for the negative altitudes like rebellion or anger.Finally their pressures accumulated to the point where they took drugs and were addicted to alcohol,resulting in losing fame and chances for development.Consequently,negative emotions exert harmful impacts on individual and always increase the stress and intensify the problem.

Some people may incline to staying alone because it can create a quiet and private environments.However,it is not the case.Quiet and private condition does not always alleviate the load.Statistics show that over 90 percents of students who prepare for the college entrance examination feel more stressed when they are left alone.And above 70 percents （of）people who admitted（committed） suicides had few friends and always were insulated from the society.Quiet environments are likely to imply people that they are abandoned.While those thoughts are filling their mind,unavoidably they feel more depressed and sensitive.Thus,chances that the quieter the conditions are, more pressures  people go through.

Generally speaking,staying alone do no help to remove pressures.Contrarily,people will intense their problem if they always stay alone and avoid interact with others.In the modern life,only if people communicate frequently with others and maintaining a positive altitudes to the life can they finally get rid of pressures and overcome difficulties as well.

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