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[托福综合作文] 刘琳涵托福综合写作作业 6.9

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发表于 2014-6-10 21:20:41 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式

Professor in the lecture disputes that three reasons for the appearance of little ice age are out-dated and unconvincing.Regarding to the professor’s statements,the Gulf streams, the eruption of volcanic and the decrease of population which are put forward by the writer as the causes of little ice age are all unreliable for the following reasons.

First, as for the gulf streams,professor proposes that streams are only cooled in Europe and North America while the gulf streams are little affected in South America and New Zealand where also the little ice age took place,which contradicts the proposition that the cooling of gulf stream change the earth climate and give rise to the little ice age. Consequently,the gulf stream is unbelievable.
Second, the lecture confutes view that the eruption of volcanic produced gas and dust which decrease the temperature and thus caused the little ice age by pointing out the lack of visual evidence of that time.The professor discusses that if the eruptions were really severe enough to cause the little ice age, there should be the visual evidence like dramatically colorful sunset ot the change of snow color from white to gray and brown.

Last but not least,professor also casts doubts on the the explanation of the decrease of the people’s population because the length of that period is too short to make temperature decreased.Shortly after the decrease of population,it soon rebounded.As a result,there was no enough time to let trees grew back and neither to let temperature descent.Thus,the reduce of population cannot be considered as the reason.

Generally speaking,the arguments from the professor reflected that points of passage are old and untenable,which fail to functions as the explanation for the occurrence of the little ice age.
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发表于 2014-6-13 17:44:34 | 只看该作者
Professor in the lecture disputes that three reasons for the appearance of little ice age are out-dated and unconvincing.Regarding to the professor’s statements,the Gulf streams, the eruption of volcanic and the decrease of population which are put forward by the writer as the causes of little ice age are all unreliable for the following reasons.

First, as for the gulf streams,professor proposes that streams are only cooled in Europe and North America while the gulf streams are little affected in South America and New Zealand where also the little ice age took place,which contradicts the proposition that the cooling of gulf stream change the earth climate and give rise to the little ice age. Consequently,the gulf stream is unbelievable.(这里漏了一个重要的单词disruption,注意再听,这个影响到了你这一段第一个句子的描述准确性)
Second, the lecture confutes view that the eruption of volcanic produced gas and dust which decrease the temperature and thus caused the little ice age by pointing out the lack of visual evidence of that time.The professor discusses that if the eruptions were really severe enough to cause the little ice age, there should be the visual evidence like dramatically colorful sunset or the change of snow color from white to gray and brown.(听力的部分重点基本上都抓住了,但是你要说一下reading的部分,你可以在段尾这么说,His argument overcomes the reading passage's opinion that volcano eruptions released enough gas and dust, which might cause the temperature to fall.)

Last but not least,professor also casts doubts on the the explanation of the decrease of the people’s population because the length of that period is too short to make temperature decreased(decrease).Shortly after the decrease of population,it soon rebounded.As a result,there was no(not) enough time to let trees grew back and neither to let temperature descent.Thus,the reduce of population cannot be considered as the reason.(如果你这里不想具体地写reading部分,略提一下,写 the decline of population can't be considered as the proof of global cooling of Little Ice Age as the passage mentioned.)

Generally speaking,the arguments from the professor reflected that points of passage are old and untenable,which fail to functions as the explanation for the occurrence of the little ice age.


总的来说,大部分细节你都听到了,在和阅读部分结合的时候,注意指出听力和阅读部分的矛盾点就可以了,但也别不写。这篇可以打到25分以上了。
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