刘琳涵托福独立写作527

vicky_niu

Several decades have witnessed people’s exponentially increasing desires for money.Many people believes that money plays the most significant role in their life and thus motivate them most in their work.From my perspective,however,public recognition should be attached more importance and often inspire people’s dedication to their jobs rather than money.As the positive public recognition usually is the premise of profits and entails huge spiritual wealth as well.

Firstly,nowadays,public recognition has become a indispensable part that makes a superb company and attracts more chance to develop as well.For instance, Microsoft corporation works hard to guarantee their responsibility for their products,fantastic creativity and the charity funds their company holds to help people in need, all of which provide few profits.Nevertheless,they create a positive figure instead of the cold and mercenary one in public minds, which ,to a large extend, attract more customers and build a trustworthy figure among potential cooperators.Also many companies make efforts to provide environmental friendly products.Higher cost though these products have, companies still stress great importance on them for the great social recognition that green products bring.

Moreover,it is usually the public recognition but not money that offers people a sense of achievements and realizes the individual life value.Nightingale,born in a rich family,abandoned her comfortable life and worked in the hospital to help numerous people during the war.Why she made such decision ? It is because the spiritual wealth that she can gain from the public recognition.Had not been for her selfless behavior,hardly could her have get sense of achievement while helping others and neither could she have enjoyed worldwide reputations.With public recognition and the following spiritual wealth ,chances are that money will loss attraction to many people.like many volunteers organization,devoting themselves to the activities that help people in remote and poor regions.It is the public recognition rather than the money that prompts their devotions.

In contrast, Under no circumstance can those merchants who unscrupulously seeking profits end up with immense material wealth, needless to say the spiritual wealth. Sanlu company,which sells milk powders with melamine causes serious hurt to many babies,suffers irreversible reputation loss and consequently few customers will choose their products.Focusing merely on money limits the progress of a company or an individual,sometimes even have a negative influence on others.

山姆大叔

Several decades have witnessed people’s exponentially increasing desires for money.Many people believes that money plays the most significant role in their life and thus motivate them most in their work.From my perspective,however,public recognition should be attached more importance and often inspire people’s dedication to their jobs rather than money.As the positive public recognition usually is the premise of profits and entails huge spiritual wealth as well.

Firstly,nowadays,public recognition has become a indispensable part that makes a superb company and attracts more chance to develop as well.For instance, Microsoft corporation works hard to guarantee their responsibility for their products,fantastic creativity and the charity funds their company holds to help people in need, all of which provide few profits.Nevertheless,they create a positive figure instead of the cold and mercenary one in public minds, which ,to a large extend, attract more customers and build a trustworthy figure among potential cooperators.Also many companies（这里可以把公司的名字指出来，环保产品的公司很多，你可以说Shell，Huawei，IBM，很多很多，不用担心会怎么样） make efforts to provide environmental friendly products.Higher cost though these products have, companies still stress great importance on them for the great social recognition that green products bring.

Moreover,it is usually the public recognition but not money that offers people a sense of achievements and realizes the individual life value.Nightingale,born in a rich family,abandoned her comfortable life and worked in the hospital to help numerous people during the war.Why she made such （a） decision ? It is because the spiritual wealth that she can gain from the public recognition.Had not been for her selfless behavior,hardly could her have get sense of achievement while helping others and neither could she have enjoyed worldwide reputations.With public recognition and the following spiritual wealth ,chances are that money will loss（lose） attraction to many people.like many volunteers organization,devoting themselves to the activities that help people in remote and poor regions(这句话没谓语，严格上来说不是一个句子).It is the public recognition rather than the money that prompts their devotions.

In contrast, Under no circumstance can those merchants who unscrupulously seeking profits end up with immense material wealth, needless to say the spiritual wealth. Sanlu company,which sells milk powders with melamine causes serious hurt to many babies,suffers irreversible reputation loss and consequently few customers will choose their products.Focusing merely on money limits the progress of a company or an individual,sometimes even have a negative influence on others.

还差一段总结没写吧，总的来说，复杂的词用得是到位了，注意造句的完整性，作文高分不是什么问题。

vicky_niu

！！！！最好一段怎么被吃掉了....可能是被我漏发了